The Times newspaper has asked the public to contribute articles for a series in their Sunday magazine supplement. If we make a concerted effort to conserve energy, could we live without electricity?
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Can you conceive your life without electricity? Imagine a complete power cutü. Imagine[m1]your house or your job without any artificial light. Imagine hospitals, commercial centres, even the street`s lights, all gone.And now try to assume that this is the new way of living. It sounds like a terrible nightmare, doesn`t it? üü
If this had happen, it would be necessary a complete change [m2]in our world. First of all, if there was no artificial light, we would need to adapt our timetables to the sun hours=. In additionü, a great amount[m3] of jobs would need to be modifiedF. For example, do you know how many people work with computers every day? How many call phones do we make? In my opinion, people would become lost and disoriented without electricity.
But this would beWO not only about jobs. Almost all our entertainmentsGworkv+[m4]with electricity. What do you normally do at home? Watching a film or playing a videogame? Not anymore! We would need to haveü candles everywhere, and of course, no more leftoversü heated in the microwave!
In conclusion, it seems almost impossible for me to imagine our life without electricity. Nowadays, we are used to have[m5];lots of comforts, most of them dependant on electrical energy and I don`t think that we are ready, materially and mentally;[m6speakingüü, to change it.
Highlight to rad comments Certainly a 6/10. A couple of translatey bits and a few grammar points to definitely pay attention to (used to, amount vs number/quantity), but the style and content are great.
A rewrite of this, with some of those points addressed (and perhaps rather fewer questions aimed at the reader) would probably hit 8/10 for me.
[m1]I guess this is a delibérate repitition – I kind of like i ton one level, but wonder if “Think of…” might be a better exam option.
[m2]would to have change completely our world – rearrange to make a natural way to say this!
You have recently had a discussion in your English class about places to live. Now your
teacher has asked you to write an essay, giving your opinion on the following statement.
Whatever your age, life in the country is always better than life in the city.
There's a lot of opinions about where life is better but inmy opinion, the advantages are more ^ than the disadvantages ifü you live in the city.
In the cities there're more options that you can choose. The important building are usually in the center, where everybody can arrive. There are also more activities, what is moreü, ifyou are a teenager the city is more amazingü, because it's bigger, there's more party, but ifyou're an adult it can also be better, because your office will probably be there. (Adults don’t go to parties then? Hmmmm!)
To sum upü I would choose living in the city, because i think it is more enjoyableü, whereas i could maybe feel bored in the country.I also think if you're studingSP a careerV you should live in the city, because ^is the place where you will have more opportunities.ü
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8/10 Very good – lots of good “effort” vocab – a few things to work on to get towards 10 - if you want it, it’s doable!
Over the last century people’s lifes have completely changed<!--[if !supportAnnotations]-->[m1]<!--[endif]--> upside down. This is due to, above all, [the existence of] electricity.
Nowadays, it has become crucialü for every single activity we do, since<!--[if !supportAnnotations]-->[m2]<!--[endif]--> doing the shopping, or takingü a warm bath; even when we are sleeping we relay on the alarm clock to go offü and make us start a new day on time. If electricity didn’t exist, life would be totallyü different.
First of all, we would have to adapt our lives to sunlight, reducing working time from eight to five hours in winter. And, asü we wouldn’t have anything to do from sunset to dawn, we could sleep at least 9 hours every day!!
When it comes toü leisure time, we could only do outdoor activities, such as running, strollingü, or going out with our friends. We had to learn how to survive<!--[if !supportAnnotations]-->[m3]<!--[endif]--> without mobile phones, video games and gossip programmes on TV.... Can you imagine?? We wouldn’t have to put up with them anymore!
Regarding work, we wouldn’t have to spend so many hours in front of a computer / machine / whatever, as lots of people do. It would all boil down to (oooh!) just one thing: getting food. Fishing and hunting would take the most of our time, which might sound a bit hazardousü... especially for men! But of course, women would only be in charge of collecting mushrooms and plants in the forest all day, strolling and talking to one another. (a substitute for the gossip programmes….?)
For all these reasons, you’ll have to agree with me when I say life would be much better without electricity! Of course, there wouldn’t be any security, medicine for diseases, or even clothes, but ... who cares??
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A terrific piece of work. To be honest, I can’t find much wrong with it (although I think a bit more hypothetical would be appropriate in two of the underlined places). We shall say 8/10, but that’s my conservative nature. I really think it’s at least 8/10.